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@@ -309,9 +309,9 @@ a legally dubious, it is a reason that people wish to be hidden. And finally it
 going to large corporations, who are known for selling user data.
 
 \subsection{Some known examples}
-When looking for an example of a privacy enthusiast, it can be hard, as most of them are quite good at being private, and thus
-much information is hard to find, however there are some known examples of people who attempt to hide them self for one reason
-or another.
+When looking for privacy experts, historical examples are the best place to look; as these are well documented, and thus easier to study.
+There are many examples of privacy being used to better situations, for a multitude of reasons, and here is a list of a few notible and well
+documented examples.
 
 \begin{description}
 	\item[BBC reporters and readers: ] 
@@ -359,7 +359,8 @@ corporation or other such entity. For this reason free and open software is perf
 seen by all who vet these tools on a daily basis. Another reason that one can draw as to why someone would want to use free tools is that they are
 less restricted in what they can do; Non-free tools are limited by corporate law and other such things, Free Software on the other hand is less limited
 as restricting what individuals make and share, would end up making many things in common life illegal. Its under these rules that tools such as
-TORcan exist. 
+TOR can exist.
+
 \section{Where else is Free Software used and why?} 
 Free Software is used in many places, it is versatile, and easy to modify, which is ideal for most corporate situations or public 
 services. For example Free Software is in libraries to allow for easy management of books and databases\cite{LIBRARIESFOSS}. In libraries,
@@ -382,6 +383,7 @@ changing without their control. All of these reasons, and many others have lead
 The same level of growth is being seen with developers, becoming a large community, commonly associated with the Free Software movement. Newer tools
 are always being made, with the advancements in AI, including the first open models and frameworks, such as Llama; new IDE's and improving features in existing
 ones, for example vim getting full/improved LSP features.
+
 \section{Closing thoughts}
 After reading this paper, one can hopefully see there is some benefit to the use of Free Software by development and privacy experts, as it clearly tends
 more to their needs, and is developed with them in mind, unlike alternative proprietary software software. It is clear that it is a growing space, with